Fiery shades of red
Dazzle across the canvas;
A tint of orange
Lingers in the Painter’s brush;
Hush the vast expanse.
Enchanting music
Of waves coming home to shore
Serenades the Sun
Lulling in the horizon;
Precious peace, she hums!
Breathtaking colors
Gleam in the serene waters;
A few shades of gray
Serve as the tableau’s backdrop;
What a lovely sight!
Two souls sit in awe
Enthralled by the glorious scene
Flashing above them
The masterpiece, the treasure
Of the Master’s hand.
Two hearts deeply touched
Go warm and supple and lithe
Turn to each other
Talking of love and prom’ses;
A soft vow is made
As gleaming silh’ette
Gracefully makes her entrance;
And li’l sparklers
Disperse themselves far and wide;
Night has fin’lly come.
Dazzle across the canvas;
A tint of orange
Lingers in the Painter’s brush;
Hush the vast expanse.
Enchanting music
Of waves coming home to shore
Serenades the Sun
Lulling in the horizon;
Precious peace, she hums!
Breathtaking colors
Gleam in the serene waters;
A few shades of gray
Serve as the tableau’s backdrop;
What a lovely sight!
Two souls sit in awe
Enthralled by the glorious scene
Flashing above them
The masterpiece, the treasure
Of the Master’s hand.
Two hearts deeply touched
Go warm and supple and lithe
Turn to each other
Talking of love and prom’ses;
A soft vow is made
As gleaming silh’ette
Gracefully makes her entrance;
And li’l sparklers
Disperse themselves far and wide;
Night has fin’lly come.
//A poem I was able to create from pieces of verses I posted when I challenged MCP to a duel using 5-7-5-7-5 metering (an extended version of haiku. This metering we called ChaikuS)
//First posted in Kamarin ni MSB in Clifton Pascua's blog in iluko.com, April 11, 2007
8 comments:
nice ChaikuS MSB, very nice. Waaa... dito ako talo.
I can only write but my love to you my dear.
that's tanka i notice your picture either taken from top or from bottom up which means you're about 5 2 or shorter.
Hi anonymous. A tanka is comprised of 5 lines, the metering of which is 5-7-5-7-7.
Ours is 5-7-5-7-5. And we call it ChaikuS.
As for my height, I don't think it really matters. But just to straighten facts, the measuring device says I am 5'4."
Sorry but you are wrong on both counts.
i know clift haiku sherma (chaikus) i ain't wrong ma'am
i'm pretty close on your height
by looking at picture alone... hehehehehe... peace manang uray no baligtabaligatadem tanka pay ti nagan na manang.
is that with high heels? mariknak tay pudot ti agong mo manang. sorry
agmultaak to no agawidak palubos ni Apo Diyos.
On your claim that the poem I posted (Sunset by the Sea) is a tanka:
If we go by the definition of a tanka, I am definitely right and you are definitely wrong. Of course, you can name our metering a tanka, if you’d rather go against the established definition (no one can stop you from doing that). Doing so would make you right in some way, but only in YOUR mind; and only in YOUR reality. Elsewhere, it’s a different story.
On my height:
You said I am either 5’2” or shorter. And I said you are wrong because the measuring device says otherwise. In argumentation and debate, you can only be either wrong or right. Being close to being right does not make you right. Moreover, the terms “almost right” and “nearly right” both mean wrong.
And on your question about whether or not the measurement includes the high heels, let me ask you: Do people measure their height with their high heels/shoes on?
On Chaikus:
That’s the only thing you got right (hah!).
Ala, isaganam ngarud ta multam.
'pay 'ya dayta height a pakaringoranyo? No diak mariro idi rinukodka ms. benosa ket 162.56 cms ka met?
ania ti kunada dagitay anggalog itayen -"tinimbang kita ngunit sobra"!
hehehehe!
Huuuuuuuuuuu. Maysa ka met VF. Sika man laeng ti ammok a mangusar iti weighing scale to measure someone's height.
Huuuu! Niat' mapaspasamak ditoy lubongen?
Really? Ouch, ‘thought I’m using a manometer hehehe…
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