THE POETIC PROCESS

Recently, I saw a blog of some guy whom I do not know (don’t even remember how I got to his blog: http://nextgr8twriter.wordpress.com/2007/06/05/the-poetic-process/), but whose writing I like. In one of his posts, he talked about poetic process, and led his readers through his way of writing poetry: from his raw thoughts, through several versions.

Because it’s just recently that I really learned to appreciate poetry, I was amazed at how one thought can be poetically said in different ways, in different poetry forms. (With my quasi-poems, I just get my thoughts onto paper and that’s it).

I cannot be as good as that guy, but I did try writing poetry his way. And here’s what I came up with:


MY ORIGINAL THOUGHT:

I fell in love
and suddenly
my dreams —
even the impossible —
came to life.

I fell in love
and suddenly
I lost the emptiness
within me.
Now, I’m alive.



MY FIRST DRAFT:

I fell in love
and finally
the moon and the sun
came face to face
in the same sky.

I fell in love
and finally,
life ceased
to be a garden
devoid of flowers.


MY SECOND DRAFT:

Love whispered
and I saw
the moon and the sun
in amorous embrace
amidst wistful clouds
on a bright red sky.

Love beckoned
And I felt something
in me bloom.
Fin’lly life ceased
to be a garden
that knows no flowers.

VERDICT: Needs more practice. Nyehehehehe

//Sherma E. Benosa
20 July 2007; 12:24am